I made him a bit wider, and removed the cross on his face. I like the larger look, as i think it will give me more animating opportunities. I rethought my story, and made it follow the three act structure to a T. Here are my notes below:
I. Act I
A. Exposition
1. Main Character
a) Businessman.
(1) a little large, but not too athletically challenged.
(2) has a love for donuts.
(3) loves his work to death, would hate to get fired.
2. Dramatic Premise
a) his papers are blown away while eating his donut. he struggles to get them back under a time limit. (1 hour)
3. Dramatic Situation
a) time limit. everything wrong keeps happening. has to find creative ways to get his papers in outrageously hopeless situations. wins in the end due to his cleverness.
b) uses the objects in his suitcase as tools to get the job done.
c) the stakes are constantly raised.
B. Inticing Incident
1. he notices one of his papers have fallen out of his suitcase when he opens it to pull out his cell phone. (pulls out next to post it saying papers due: 9:00 AM
2. closes briefcase, walks over to pick it up, it begins to blow.
3. keeps chasing it until he trips and his briefcase opens up. as he puts his stuff back in, it blows away across the street.
C. Plot Point A
1. shock on his face. checks his watch. 8:00. Runs to get the first paper.
II. Act II
A. Obstacles
1. has to cross the street despite the light being red. runs but almost gets hit twice.
2. looks for it in a crowd of people. sees it hanging on top of the bus stop fence. climbs it to grab it, but slips and falls in the street. bus comes, and he jumps out of the way, with his paper attached to the back.
3. calls a taxi. gives him 100 bucks, the car drives after the bus very quickly. reaches the back, tries to grab, has fingers almost on it approaches two-lane tunnel. sees the bus going down the off ramp when tunnel exits. car stops, looks through conviently placed binos. (25c) sees it gone, sees it now in a tree.
4. approaches tree takes tie, uses it to climb tree. sees paper in nest @ very top of tree. grabs it. hears branch cracking. falls. wakes up. sees paper. then sees squirrel. inches for paper, and squirrel runs off with it. look of frustration.
B. First Culmination
1. squirrel runs off with it. look of frustration. chases it, but can't keep up. while he's chasing it and the camera moves towards the squirrel, a bird comes and takes the squirrel as lunch the opposite direction, back towards the city.
C. Midpoint
1. squirrel runs off with it. look of frustration. chases it, but can't keep up.
D. Plot Point B
1. while he's chasing it and the camera moves towards the squirrel, a bird comes and takes the squirrel as lunch the opposite direction, back towards the city.
III. Act III
A. Climax
1. bird flies towards a building across the street from his. runs in, takes the elevator all the way up to the top floor. walks across the roof to the paper, hanging out over the ledge. gets on top of the building, having to reach out over the ledge for it on the flag pole. actually reaches it. goes back in the elevator, watches as he is almost at the bottom (glass elevator, his building is right across the way) and it gets stuck. fire alarm comes on. guy freaks. starts pressing the button repeatedly. fire department comes to open the door, and the guy rushes out. runs out the door, for the building. is almost there, gets hit by a car.
B. Denouement
1. wakes up in bandages with his suitcase next to him. people at his job stare as he is taken into the ambulance. he sees his ceo, hands him the suitcase. is loaded up on the ambulance, and the ambulance drives off.
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Untitled from Michael Shaw on Vimeo.
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